Pen and Paper: Essay by Margie Mequiabas
A short story entitled Pen and Paper is all about the story of Sophia when she was studied to the city, and she was far from her family so she take her dormitory that near to her school to make comfortable to her study . Sophia was a very dedicated and hardwork when it comes to her study because she wanted her family would be proud of her so that she strive hard that’s why she was a top of her class.
One day when she go home her grandmother asked her why? Sophia look so pale but Sophia ignore it and her sister was answered the grandmother’s question but behind of that Sophia was had already a brain cancer, but still she keeps her big secret in herself because she don’t want her family to get worried of her situation if possible. On the other hand she was already accept of what will happen to her anytime, so that she spent her time to write everything that she makes happy to her before she left in this world instead of sobbing she tried getting more that what she spent for.
The day of her graduation, they are all very excited because this serve as the most awaited moment of Sophia, that she was graduate and she fulfill her dream to become a valedictorian of her graduation day. but it was suddenly on that day they are all surprise that it was the end of sophia’s life at the same time her family found out that she has brain cancer that lead to her death and they are confirm just because of the letter wrote Sophia the night before her graduation day and Sophia she asked sorry to her mother that she didn’t tell her big secret so her family was very disappointed instead of being happy they are all very sad because of what sophia’s happen and her mother still praying that one day will be okay and hoping that she can move on with that bad experience that her daughter gone the day of her graduation day because of the brain cancer.
The main character in the story is Sophia who suffered a brain cancer that lead to her death. and I think Sophia said to be the main character of this story because she is the center of the story and she is a girl with a very simple she is the person that don’t let anybody to worried about everything in here and very independent person and have a strong determination in her life because even she suffering a brain cancer she spite with herself. and I think the dominant impression created by the character being industrious with here study, being simple. I think as a reader the factors that contributed in this impression is that she is very perseverance in regard to her study even she already suffered a very painful illness.
Jenny is the best friend of Sophia is the secondary character of the story and Eric also said secondary character of the story said to be a brother of Sophia the mother of Sophia, Grandmother, and I think they are the main character most especially her mother, grandmother. I think in this story the main character involved with an internal conflict because she suffered a brain cancer but she’s trying keeps it into secret even her family they are not aware of it or in other words Sophia is a person who is the very secretive to her problem.
The other character also involved in the conflict by having a hard time in accepting the situation after the discovered that Sophia suffered a brain cancer. And I think it is very hard for them most especially to her family grandmother, brother, sister, mother because no time to take care of Sophia that even in their own simple way they can help Sophia in her painful situation that she has a brain cancer maybe if she is not secret to her problem her pain was cured.
In this exposition is not stated very well instead of the author write the place and time when or where it happens although we can see here that the author give a little information about the main character but still there is a lack of information about the main character and in this story also I never see that the author introduced the conflict in the opening incident and also the sets of plot and motion and the very important also in the exposition to state the necessary background information..
I cannot see that the rising action of this story because as what I have observed very lack of information that can be determined as the incident of the story. Falling action also in this story is not clear because the author did not present a very shocking event or the very crucial event or happen in the story.
The conflict of the story maybe bring into the high point when her brother found the main character in here room that she’s not breathing anymore and I think it is to be said the climax of the story. for me I am not satisfied with the story because I not sure if the girl who is the main character was past away at that moment or she will be dying or comatose when her brother saw inside the room. For me the conclusion still hanging they didn’t brought the story to a close because I can’t find stated in this story.
The author use only one kind of narrator which is the limited third person I think the author should use two kinds of narrator instead of one so that the story becomes more excitement. but for me in this story much better if the author include herself in the story and the describing the event of what she sees instead use of limited or third person the author must also the first person or include in this story to make this story possible and interested to the reader.
This is the story of Ms. Faith C. Delostrico entitled Pen and Paper she is the one who tell the story this paragraph in the story that is being told in this particular point of view that Sophia didn’t tell her big secret to anyone, even though to her best friend. She really keeps it especially to her family. Sophia always felt headache when she was still in her dorm. She decided to go to the doctor, then the doctor found out that she had a brain cancer. Sophia was so sad and disappointed. She always cries every night about her problem. She doesn’t know what to do and she don’t have planned to tell it to her family because she did not want them to get worried.
In this dialogue the story be change if will told to another point of view like by using first person and its change the story it should be like this I didn’t tell my big to anyone even though to my best friend. I really keep it especially to my family. I always felt headache when I was still in my dorm. I decided to go to the doctor, then the doctor found out that I have a brain cancer I was so sad and disappointed. I always cry every night about my problem. I did not know what to do and I don’t have planned to tell it to my family because I did not want them to get worry. By using he or she it change the story.
I feel happy especially in the first paragraph because she is a person who is very good model to us in terms of her studying and fulfilling her ambition. at the same time feel sad other mix emotion in my part because the main character who is Sophia didn’t overcome the tragic happen in her life. I relate the story in the since that I feel pity to her to the main character who named sophia. In the first part of the story I was able to relate also because I admire her perseverance her industriousness, hardship to finished her studies and to give proud to her family even she already a brain cancer she still hoping that the day of her graduation day she become a valedictorian, she’s success but sad to know she was gone on that day.
As a reader I expect more information, challenges, actions, in where the main character involved because for me it’s so excite and as I observed it is so very short and lack of opening incident because a reader we feel interest to the story when the story is perfect. What can I suggest to the author should improve the organizing of ideas and use proper word. And see to it that the sentence structure very well arranged. And avoid using repeated words because in the first part she always use a word “She” instead of comma.
One day when she go home her grandmother asked her why? Sophia look so pale but Sophia ignore it and her sister was answered the grandmother’s question but behind of that Sophia was had already a brain cancer, but still she keeps her big secret in herself because she don’t want her family to get worried of her situation if possible. On the other hand she was already accept of what will happen to her anytime, so that she spent her time to write everything that she makes happy to her before she left in this world instead of sobbing she tried getting more that what she spent for.
The day of her graduation, they are all very excited because this serve as the most awaited moment of Sophia, that she was graduate and she fulfill her dream to become a valedictorian of her graduation day. but it was suddenly on that day they are all surprise that it was the end of sophia’s life at the same time her family found out that she has brain cancer that lead to her death and they are confirm just because of the letter wrote Sophia the night before her graduation day and Sophia she asked sorry to her mother that she didn’t tell her big secret so her family was very disappointed instead of being happy they are all very sad because of what sophia’s happen and her mother still praying that one day will be okay and hoping that she can move on with that bad experience that her daughter gone the day of her graduation day because of the brain cancer.
The main character in the story is Sophia who suffered a brain cancer that lead to her death. and I think Sophia said to be the main character of this story because she is the center of the story and she is a girl with a very simple she is the person that don’t let anybody to worried about everything in here and very independent person and have a strong determination in her life because even she suffering a brain cancer she spite with herself. and I think the dominant impression created by the character being industrious with here study, being simple. I think as a reader the factors that contributed in this impression is that she is very perseverance in regard to her study even she already suffered a very painful illness.
Jenny is the best friend of Sophia is the secondary character of the story and Eric also said secondary character of the story said to be a brother of Sophia the mother of Sophia, Grandmother, and I think they are the main character most especially her mother, grandmother. I think in this story the main character involved with an internal conflict because she suffered a brain cancer but she’s trying keeps it into secret even her family they are not aware of it or in other words Sophia is a person who is the very secretive to her problem.
The other character also involved in the conflict by having a hard time in accepting the situation after the discovered that Sophia suffered a brain cancer. And I think it is very hard for them most especially to her family grandmother, brother, sister, mother because no time to take care of Sophia that even in their own simple way they can help Sophia in her painful situation that she has a brain cancer maybe if she is not secret to her problem her pain was cured.
In this exposition is not stated very well instead of the author write the place and time when or where it happens although we can see here that the author give a little information about the main character but still there is a lack of information about the main character and in this story also I never see that the author introduced the conflict in the opening incident and also the sets of plot and motion and the very important also in the exposition to state the necessary background information..
I cannot see that the rising action of this story because as what I have observed very lack of information that can be determined as the incident of the story. Falling action also in this story is not clear because the author did not present a very shocking event or the very crucial event or happen in the story.
The conflict of the story maybe bring into the high point when her brother found the main character in here room that she’s not breathing anymore and I think it is to be said the climax of the story. for me I am not satisfied with the story because I not sure if the girl who is the main character was past away at that moment or she will be dying or comatose when her brother saw inside the room. For me the conclusion still hanging they didn’t brought the story to a close because I can’t find stated in this story.
The author use only one kind of narrator which is the limited third person I think the author should use two kinds of narrator instead of one so that the story becomes more excitement. but for me in this story much better if the author include herself in the story and the describing the event of what she sees instead use of limited or third person the author must also the first person or include in this story to make this story possible and interested to the reader.
This is the story of Ms. Faith C. Delostrico entitled Pen and Paper she is the one who tell the story this paragraph in the story that is being told in this particular point of view that Sophia didn’t tell her big secret to anyone, even though to her best friend. She really keeps it especially to her family. Sophia always felt headache when she was still in her dorm. She decided to go to the doctor, then the doctor found out that she had a brain cancer. Sophia was so sad and disappointed. She always cries every night about her problem. She doesn’t know what to do and she don’t have planned to tell it to her family because she did not want them to get worried.
In this dialogue the story be change if will told to another point of view like by using first person and its change the story it should be like this I didn’t tell my big to anyone even though to my best friend. I really keep it especially to my family. I always felt headache when I was still in my dorm. I decided to go to the doctor, then the doctor found out that I have a brain cancer I was so sad and disappointed. I always cry every night about my problem. I did not know what to do and I don’t have planned to tell it to my family because I did not want them to get worry. By using he or she it change the story.
I feel happy especially in the first paragraph because she is a person who is very good model to us in terms of her studying and fulfilling her ambition. at the same time feel sad other mix emotion in my part because the main character who is Sophia didn’t overcome the tragic happen in her life. I relate the story in the since that I feel pity to her to the main character who named sophia. In the first part of the story I was able to relate also because I admire her perseverance her industriousness, hardship to finished her studies and to give proud to her family even she already a brain cancer she still hoping that the day of her graduation day she become a valedictorian, she’s success but sad to know she was gone on that day.
As a reader I expect more information, challenges, actions, in where the main character involved because for me it’s so excite and as I observed it is so very short and lack of opening incident because a reader we feel interest to the story when the story is perfect. What can I suggest to the author should improve the organizing of ideas and use proper word. And see to it that the sentence structure very well arranged. And avoid using repeated words because in the first part she always use a word “She” instead of comma.